Some people think that the best way to reduce crimes is to apply longer prison sentences, other people think that there are better methods of doing so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Nowadays, there is always an argument about how to reduce
crimes
. Some communities think applying longer prison sentences is the best Use synonyms
way
. I believe it could be an efficient Use synonyms
way
to reduce Use synonyms
criminals
but not the best method to stop Use synonyms
people
to commit Use synonyms
crimes
.
Some Use synonyms
people
suggest longer prison sentences is the best to decrease Use synonyms
people
to commit Use synonyms
crimes
because it could change Use synonyms
criminals
’ mind Use synonyms
during
a long period of time. Change preposition
over
For example
, prisons usually have a Linking Words
discipline
schedule with a lot of Change the verb form
disciplined
works
on it for prisoners. The density Fix the agreement mistake
work
activities
and long hours of labour can grind Change preposition
of activities
the
minds of them, which could let them become more peaceful than before. Change the word
their
Thus
, when they finished their sentences, they would not want to commit Linking Words
crimes
again as that thought is erased when they were in Use synonyms
jails
.
Fix the agreement mistake
jail
However
, some others think there are better methods to reduce Linking Words
the
Correct article usage
apply
crimes
. Giving education to Use synonyms
criminals
could be one of the best ways because most Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
apply
the
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apply
people
Use synonyms
commit
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who commit
crimes
Use synonyms
is
due to Unnecessary verb
apply
the
lack of learning. Correct article usage
a
For instance
, the reason why most Linking Words
criminals
rob, Use synonyms
stealing
, or kidnap Wrong verb form
steal
people
is that they need to do it Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
to
survive
as they do not have a good Replace the word
survival
condition
to find a job. If Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
government
could make a school system for these Add an article
the government
people
, they could obtain correct knowledge and get an occupation to have a stable income. Use synonyms
Thus
, they would not have thoughts of Linking Words
commit
Change the verb form
committing
crimes
again since they have a better quality of life.
In conclusion, I believe letting the authority set prisoners’ sentence Use synonyms
be
longer could be a Unnecessary verb
apply
way
to help Use synonyms
crimes
be reduced but it would not solve the root of the problem. Letting the Use synonyms
criminals
and the communities which may have a chance to commit Use synonyms
crimes
Use synonyms
to
take long-term education could be the best Fix the infinitive
apply
way
because it would erase the root of Use synonyms
this
issue.Linking Words
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite