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Directors of large organizations receive much higher salaries than ordinary workers. Some think it is necessary while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some believe that executives of large companies should receive higher pay packets compared to ordinary
workers
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 others claim
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 is an unfair approach. In my opinion, providing those in managerial positions with
excessive
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amount
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 of
wage
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 compared to the other
employees
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 can demotivate general
workers
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 and make them feel indifferent about their basic responsibilities. On the one hand, people think rewarding those in higher positions with good remunerations can motivate
employees
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 with less salary to thrive on challenges they undertake and reach executive roles as soon as possible. It is argued that
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 might increase the
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 level of productivity of
workers
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 in businesses which might lead them to obtain more revenue in the long run.
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, newly hired staff generally look up to those who have the entitlement to make strategic decisions about the company and try their best to reach
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their level and obtain the same
amount
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 of remuneration.
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, others, including me, claim that
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 tendency might be the source of discouragement for general
employees
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. Once they find out about the gap between the pay packets, they might feel underappreciated and underestimated since they are the ones who execute all the technical parts of the work.
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 might cause them to feel indifferent about the tasks they undertake since they do not receive the appropriate
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 of
compensations
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compensation
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 for their hard work. Even some of them can consider the option of quitting and finding
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 work.
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 trend might lead organizations to lose many productive
workers
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 and decrease the
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 profitability of operations since no one wants to take their jobs seriously.
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, even though some companies choose to pay
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amount
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 of salary to directors, I believe those businesses should
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 take consider the detrimental effects of
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 practice and make some adjustments to wage policies in order not to demotivate ordinary
employees
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 and make them lose interest
toward
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 their jobs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Disproportionate, Exorbitant, Compensation, Executive, Inequality, Morale, Performance-based, Transparency, Disparity, Retain, Attract, Innovation, Motivation, Talent, Equity, Leadership, Societal, Exponentially
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