In some countries ,more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in.Other people are not interested in it saying it's boring.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays one of the widely discussed issues is that in many nations,more and more individuals are becoming
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discovering
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the chronicle of the house or building
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is
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they lived.From my way of thinking,
this
condition is beneficial for
people
. Some
people
believe that learning
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occupied place,
it
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is very interesting and very useful for
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.For
this
reason,If
persons
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search
memorial
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things
from their places,it helps
people
will know
many
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many
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knowledge about their
ancestors
.After that all
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and older
persons
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will know history subject very well.Take as an example,nowadays many statements scientists learn and seek memorial
things
,ladies
jewelries
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jewelry
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,
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queens
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building jugs, sword and other.
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that learning
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places
helps
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people
and countries earn lots of money.That's why these days more and more public attracted their
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humans for
this
work and give a lot of money for it.Generation gaps will know and always don't remember it.They will learn good
things
from their
ancestors
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ancestor's
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life
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. Other
people
think that it is very harmful
for
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us.Because some our of
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behaviour was been very harmful.
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young
people
might dislike their
ancestors
.As an example,
last
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many SSSR
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stuff
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talk bad sentences about Amir Temur.
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,some
people
dislike
this
person
also
still. Having weighed everything mentioned
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,I can come to
a
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conclusion that all
thing
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have benefits aspect and negative
aspect
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.
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my opinion,learning
historical
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buildings and other
things
are more and more beneficial for us.
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