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What is your opinion about the advantages of smoking cigarettes?

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Despite the fact that smoking severely harms our health as it could lead to certain lung diseases, some people still believe that it has merits
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 as relaxing nerves and helping us lose body
weight
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. From my point of view, these thoughts suffer from logical and factual issues, and I hardly agree with them. In
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 essay, I will discuss why I disagree with them with proper explanations and exemplifications.
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 with, though smoking is indeed one of many ways to help people calm down when they are nervous or anxious, it is not the only approach. There are many other much healthier alternatives,
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, chewing gum, taking a deep breath or drinking some water. Without a doubt, any of these methods is much better than taking cigarettes.
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,
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first
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 advantage of smoking seems not convincing.
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, when it comes to losing
weight
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, there is no scientific evidence demonstrating that smoking has a positive impact on it. In sharp contrast, several studies have shown the exact flipping opposite.
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, research has shown that nicotine is one of those sources that could possibly boost a person's appetite, which leads to the risk of gaining more
weight
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.
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, the claim of smoking benefits
weight
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 loss is disproven. In conclusion, there is a considerable portion of the population that claims smoking has its own merits.
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, as I have mentioned above, some of these "advantages" are actually problematic and there are much better options that benefit our mental and physical health.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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