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People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. what are the causes of this problem? How to overcome it?

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It is common these days that
people
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 struggle to balance their
work
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 and daily lives.
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 some are lucky enough to get their lives together, other
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 still find it hard.
This
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 essay will discuss the causes and suggest a possible solution. There are many reasons why it is hard to find a balance.
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, some
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 get drained
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work
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 it is not allowed to
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 more than eight hours a day,
people
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 would take their
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home and continue from there.
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 puts a
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 under too much pressure and would find it difficult to spend
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else where
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. Another reason is that 
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 take
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 too seriously.
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 creates a struggle to find a balanced
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 since
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 would ignore other activities and not participate and build interest in other fields.
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, a
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 would only go from home to
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 and vice versa, not spending free
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 reading a book or going to the gym. A possible solution would be to create a routine and stick to it. It is highly advised by therapists
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spend
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 doing what makes a
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 happy in order not to maintain a healthy
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.
People
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 would need to find what makes them energised and keep them going. If a
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 added to his daily routine a thing that would
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 his energy, it would lead to a balance in their
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 and
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. In conclusion, healthy
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 needs to be achieved by spending equal
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in
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work
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 and enjoying
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. Working long hours and not setting a routine would not help
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 to a balanced
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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