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People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. what are the causes of this problem? How to overcome it?

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It is common these days that
people
 struggle to balance their
work
 and daily lives.
Although
 some are lucky enough to get their lives together, other
people
 still find it hard.
This
 essay will discuss the causes and suggest a possible solution. There are many reasons why it is hard to find a balance.
Firstly
, some
people
 get drained
in
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work
.
Although
 it is not allowed to
work
 more than eight hours a day,
people
 would take their
work
to
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home and continue from there.
This
 puts a
person
 under too much pressure and would find it difficult to spend
time
else where
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. Another reason is that 
people
 take
work
 too seriously.
This
 creates a struggle to find a balanced
life
 since
people
 would ignore other activities and not participate and build interest in other fields.
For example
, a
person
 would only go from home to
work
 and vice versa, not spending free
time
 reading a book or going to the gym. A possible solution would be to create a routine and stick to it. It is highly advised by therapists
to
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spend
time
 doing what makes a
person
 happy in order not to maintain a healthy
life
.
People
 would need to find what makes them energised and keep them going. If a
person
 added to his daily routine a thing that would
boosts
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 his energy, it would lead to a balance in their
work
 and
life
. In conclusion, healthy
life
 needs to be achieved by spending equal
time
in
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work
 and enjoying
life
. Working long hours and not setting a routine would not help
people
 to a balanced
life
.
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