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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount that people can earn.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 believe that high wage has benefits for the country. Whereas a group of
people
 earn a lot of money. ,
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 others consider that the government should organize the number of wages. In my ,opinion a salary must be equal for all the
people
 who are working well. Some professions
such
 as judge, economist, lawyer, detective and engineer get high salaries in most countries. Because
this
 kind of job demands skill and they should be responsible for their work field.
Therefore
 they deserve to get a high amount of wage.
For example
, the most paying work is judge and their average earning is almost 8 million rug rugs.
However
, it is a hard and respectful profession, it is unfair to others who are doing tough labour that demands their physical skill. The
people
 doing manual work and other majors
such
 as teachers, doctors, and office workers get a bad salary in a month.
For instance
, Especially teachers and doctors earn about 1 million to 1.2 million rug rugs in Mongolia. But it is the most important field for all the
people
 who are living in
this
 country. All in all, the government should control their earnings and implement the salary law for all humans equally.
Hence
, it is good for
people
 to live with satisfaction and feel happy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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