These days,
a
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apply
yong
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young
adults
makes a number of income the main Change the noun form
adult
factors
in choosing a major in a university. Of course, it is important to think about the future and aim to be wealthy. Fix the agreement mistake
factor
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, I do not think it has to be the main reason Linking Words
in
deciding Change preposition
for
major
, and Correct article usage
a major
therefore
I strongly disagree with it.
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of all, the list of courses that offer Linking Words
big
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a big
opportunity
to get Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
a
nice Correct article usage
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paid
is quite limited. Replace the word
pay
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the
occupation like Correct article usage
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nurse
, data scientist, doctor etc Add an article
a nurse
the nurse
are
the most Change the verb form
is
favorite
courses because those wages are above the average. Because of that, the students Change the spelling
favourite
whom
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who
interest
in other Add an article
an interest
major
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majors
not
as much as those Add a missing verb
are not
field
of Fix the agreement mistake
fields
studies
. Meanwhile, if people Fix the agreement mistake
study
willing
to take Add a missing verb
are willing
a
research more about Remove the article
apply
other
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another career path
other career paths
career
path, they will find Use synonyms
much
more successful Correct quantifier usage
many
perons
working as a writer, a photographer, a pianist and others. That may happen because they work and choose their Correct your spelling
person
persons
career
regarding Use synonyms
to
their passion. Even if others give a huge offer, it is not affected Remove the preposition
apply
to
them.
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apply
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, the amount of an employee's fee Linking Words
is
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apply
totaly
depends on Correct your spelling
totally
he
or Correct pronoun usage
his
she
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her
competenies
and tangible skills. Correct your spelling
competencies
In other words
, you will get a good salary as long as you Linking Words
fulfill
the company's Change the spelling
fulfil
requirement
. Fix the agreement mistake
requirements
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, in my country Linking Words
not
every medical Add the comma(s)
,not
students
build Change to a singular noun
student
their
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a
career
in the health field. Use synonyms
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, they had started their small business and Linking Words
became
an entrepreneur. Wrong verb form
become
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,
the money they already spent in Remove the comma
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the
medical school was a lot, they had taken a new step and followed Correct article usage
apply
other
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another career possibility
other career possibilities
career
possibility. Use synonyms
Finally
, they gained their own tangible skills and be that person who Linking Words
have
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has
high quality
competencies in Add a hyphen
high-quality
business
field.
In a conclusion, setting aside the number of our bank account, people Add an article
the business
has
a right to study Change the verb form
have
align
based on their basic talent and potential. As an Correct word choice
and align
adolesent
who has Correct your spelling
adolescent
a
freedom to explore various Correct article usage
the
experience
, we have to believe that our passion is Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
come
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to come
coming
first
. I believe the high amount of income will match our high value.Linking Words