In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation.

It is said that longevity is increased
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worldwide
. while there are some benefits to being
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existance
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existence
, I believe it brings more disadvantages. Obviously living longer brings great benefits.
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many people in their seventies and eighties and even older, are able to enjoy a long and fulfilling retirement.
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means that they can do their favourite activities, that were Impossible while working and bringing up a family,
such
as travelling.
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,
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elderly
people boast
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experience
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througout
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throughout
their life
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it is believed that they are a golden-ager
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may be able to help
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generation to find
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way to live. But while there are lots of merits of life expectancy, all of them depend on being healthy and having money. Older
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people
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kind of illnesses
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as
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disease and
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pain in their legs.
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to explore in the other hand, the cost of health services is so high that health insurance needs to
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. and
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more
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of disease. That might be hard for
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if
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involved a big number of old people. In conclusion, I would argue that the
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drawbacks
of
incresing
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increasing
life's duration do
outweight
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outweigh
the merits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • demographics
  • societal development
  • healthcare system
  • pension funds
  • multigenerational
  • workforce
  • economic sustainability
  • intergenerational inequality
  • longevity
  • proactive policy
  • geriatrics
  • senior citizens
  • ageing population
  • fertility rates
  • dependency ratio
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