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In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.

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The quest to live forever or for great expanses of time has always been part of the human spirit. Nowadays, in many nations worldwide, people have a longer
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 expectancy has been increasing rapidly with sanitation, housing, and education improvements.
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 matter has some drawbacks, I believe the benefits are dominant. Away from the benefits and as far as drawbacks go,
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 dramatic increase did not come with a proportionate growth in the quality of
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 for the elderly.
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 means that the risk of disease, disability and dysfunction is rising among
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 population. Even in the absence of these issues, human abilities, including memory, cognition, mobility, sight, hearing and communication, decline with age. So, the quality of
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 for someone older than 90 years is inferior on average. A
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 downside is
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. The main consequence is the unequal and unrestrained use of the resource.
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, it may cause a shortage for a long time.
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, these put growing pressure on the economy and social systems in most countries. On the plus side, longer
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 is one of the great human desires because of that, it gives personal happiness by providing the opportunity to live longer and spend more time with our parents and grandparents. As they had gained valuable experience from their lives, they can transfer their wisdom to us, and we can do so for the
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 generation. Primarily, increasing longevity can enable people to work longer.
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, employees aged 50 and over are more engaged and experienced than the younger ones, so keeping them in the workforce supports greater productivity. In conclusion, weighing up both sides of the argument, I would say that
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 there are several issues with
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 phenomenon, the benefits it brings to the family and society as a whole are more significant and impossible to ignore.
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, in the future,
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 longing will not be just a reduction in the death rate; it will be with declining ageing and age-related disease.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • demographics
  • societal development
  • healthcare system
  • pension funds
  • multigenerational
  • workforce
  • economic sustainability
  • intergenerational inequality
  • longevity
  • proactive policy
  • geriatrics
  • senior citizens
  • ageing population
  • fertility rates
  • dependency ratio
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