Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Health care costs huge expenditure in many countries and visiting different doctors occasionally exceeds life expenses.
In addition
, easy access to online platforms has led to
people
's use of different medications and treatments on their own. In
this
essay, my contention will be
further
elaborated.
Firstly
, in terms of simple colds, insomnia, backache or feeling sick I definitely suggest not spending money and visiting doctors. Some have illness phobia that poses mental disease risks. They always search for different symptoms in their body and make an appointment with medicines.
This
stress will put them in more danger than a simple headache does
for example
.
Secondly
,
in contrast
with what I said about simple sicknesses, if any symptoms occurred frequently in a particular part of an individual's body it should be strongly recommended to visit a doctor.
Therefore
,
this
may lessen the pain in an assured way. With the development of technology in the field of health and the fund government has been forced to allocate ,
people
can be reassured that their problem will be mitigated. In the case that
people
try their not secured alternatives by reading up their problems information on different medicine websites and health applications on their smartphones, their illness may be deteriorating.
For instance
, we all suffered and got hurt by the
last
pandemic Covid19. During those years some
people
especially religious ones suggested
people
use an alternative called Emam Kazim medication.
In addition
, taking medications on your own decision and without consulting a doctor will lead to dangerous consequences. In conclusion, after
this
essay has manifested the above-mentioned points, I should reiterate that
people
must never give up their regular visiting their usual doctors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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