Your friend just had a baby. You decided to prepare a present for them. Write a letter and say : 1. Congratulate your friend 2. Ask when would be possible for you to visit 3. Ask what present they would like.
Dear Mary,
I am writing to congratulate you on having a baby to form a beautiful family. I would like to visit you someday if you are available. I am very happy for you starting a different life with
a
adorable kid.
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To begin
with, I have five holidays next month, from the 5th to the 9th. Owing to the happy moment, I plan to stay in the nearby hotel your home and visit you one
day. What is your time schedule that you would have free time to meet? We can meet up at your home someday the afternoon.
Secondly
, I am planning to buy a gift for your newborn baby. Three are in my pocket list, one
is a box of diapers, the other one
is wet swipe, and the last
one
is clothing. What is your preference among these present? I have no idea which one
is the best.
I am looking forward to your response and hope to see you soon
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Improvement
To enhance your letter, you could provide more details about how you plan to make your visit special or suggest a specific time for the visit. Additionally, personalizing the gift options by explaining why you think each may be useful or cherished could strengthen your letter.
Improvement
Consider adding a formal closing line to your letter to make it feel more complete.
Task Achievement
Your letter effectively addresses all three points of the task: congratulating your friend, inquiring about a suitable time to visit, and asking about a preferred present.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your use of paragraphs to separate different ideas makes your letter easy to follow.
Tone
Maintaining a friendly and appropriate tone throughout the letter helps in conveying your excitement and care for your friend's new stage in life.