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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, - describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team - summerize the benefits of paying for the concerts - say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I recently saw a public announcement that your organization, i.e., Reliance Industries, is going to make a decision about whether to financially support the Malden Youth Basketball
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 or host two open-air concerts. I am writing
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 email to acknowledge the benefits of both and share my opinion to help make
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 decision.
Since
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 the
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 five years, the children's basketball
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 has shown great advancement with the new coach by qualifying for the semi-finals consecutively. But they are still falling behind in the required practice time because of the absence of an assistant coach. With the sponsorship from your end, the
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 will have enough budget to hire a professional to provide more effort and encourage more children from the local community to participate at a regional level.
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, there has been a decline in local seasonal business in Malden city because, since the spread of coronavirus, a large group of people are travelling to other metro cities to enjoy holidays. If we host some musical events
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 as concerts in our city, I hope to see a lot of participation from the local public as well as outsiders.
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 both of these cause has their benefits, I suggest that your organization should sponsor the Malden Youth Basketball
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 for the
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 two years. It will allow children to recognize their talent and apply for scholarships in high schools if they perform very well in regional sports competitions. Yours sincerely, Yatharth

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