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More people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. Why? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Nowadays, it is a common concept that
people
 decide to have
children
 late in
life
 when compared to the past. Because
people
 follow new trends and due to economic instability in their lives they regret having babies.
However
, in my opinion, the negatives outweigh the positives and the following essay will
further
 elaborate with relevant examples. Commencing, today a plethora of
people
 especially the younger generation follow trends that are in society, and couples get married for the sake of having a wedding and enjoying their lives with these trends without having a baby. In the past, old-generation couples used to have
children
 when they were in their early ages because their
life
 was simple and they enjoyed having kids but today there is a
rumor
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 spreading around young
people
 that when you have kids your
life
 will not be the same and you won't be able to have fun going clubbing, and outings with friends. As an example, one of my friends is 35 years old and married and she is rejecting to have
children
 at that
age
 because she wants to enjoy
life
 and she hasn’t achieved her targets.
Thus
, having
children
 at the latter
age
 is risky for women because females are prone to get decreases in old
age
 and body metabolism is not strong enough to grow a baby inside.
On the other hand
, many countries around the world face economic problems in which citizens are unable to live by earning from one job,
hence
 a majority of nations' individuals work day and night.
Therefore
, young married couples hold a view that they won't be able to feed another human when their economy is not stable. As an example, many Sri Lankans living in other countries get married at a very small
age
 and have kids when they grow old because
first
, they try to have money and all the wealth. By doing these outrageous concepts in their real
life
 many
people
 face consequences,
such
 as some many not having babies even if they want to and the
age
 gap between parents and
children
 does not match. In conclusion, there are many disadvantages of not having
children
 at the right
age
 because
people
 follow the new trend and wait until the economy is stable.
Therefore
, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages of having a baby late in
life
.
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