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Discipline is an ever- increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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in recent times, a good
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undicipline
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discipline
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undisciplined
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 children. home is the
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teacher
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. in a nutshell,
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good
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disciplinary
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teachers
 and parents. both of them must teach the
student
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attitude
 and
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discipline
 in daily life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • modern schools
  • teachers
  • parents
  • collaboration
  • student behavior
  • performance
  • strategies
  • promoting
  • communication
  • consistency
  • teaching
  • instilling
  • home
  • classroom management
  • authority
  • rules
  • consequences
  • behavioral problems
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