Many people are choosing to move to cities. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?
There has been a remarkable increase in the number of
people
who prefer to go to a city
to live there. Where as
some Correct your spelling
Whereas
people
believe that living in a city
has more positives while
it is debatable, I would argue that why the negatives of such
a trend outweigh the positives.
Considering firstly
the negatives, cities always
crowded with Add a missing verb
are always
Correct quantifier usage
more
many
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more
people
than other places. As well as
, there is no doubt that if people
are living in urban areas they will face some pollution such
as noise, air or water. For example
, in
many developing cities have lots of Change preposition
apply
factory
Change to a plural noun
factories
that
is
why Change the verb form
are
in
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apply
there
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their
air
is the worse than countryside because Add an article
the air
factory
produce a higher amount of carbon dioxide. Fix the agreement mistake
factories
Consequently
, health problems and respiratory troubles will occur more in a city
such
as Asthma or Bronchitis.
On the other hand
, one of the most significant advantages that a city
has is that luxury life. In addition
, it is comfortable for every things
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thing
such
as education, shopping and have
a rest. Wrong verb form
having
For instance
, I live in a
countryside but I have to attend to education center Correct article usage
the
where
is located inCorrect word choice
that
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the
city
center because in
my hometown Change preposition
apply
has
not Verb problem
does
good
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have good
opportunity
to study. Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
Besides
, I have to go to city
to buy some items because in the Add an article
the city
cities'
products are Change noun form
cities
the
cheaper than countryside Correct article usage
apply
also
we can find some items in
there Change preposition
apply
what
we research Correct word choice
that
such
as different kinds of clothes, food
stuff.
In conclusion, I believe that the negatives of air pollution and traffic that come with moving to a Correct word choice
and food
city
outweigh the positives of having a well-educated child or a luxury
life.Replace the word
luxurious
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