Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Some individuals thought that tough sports like skydiving and skiing are not safe and the government should prevent people from doing them. I consider myself an opponent of

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perspective. Actually, everything might be dangerous, if you do not do that in the right way.

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, so-called dangerous sports are not as dangerous as a lot of people think. There are always some rules and types of equipment in that kind of situation

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having some experts in those competitions.

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, if they lose their concentration, doctors and experts would take care of them.

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, Ali Hossein Abadi, who is a professional sky driver in Iran he could

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to win 12 medals around the world , to the best of my memory, in his

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race he lost one of his pieces of equipment, and because of that, they stopped the competition to equip him and prevent from happening something bad. In order to have necessities

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knowledge you would change that dangerous sport into something enjoyable.

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who is doing these activities is aware of the risks that might happen.

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activities can bring adrenaline into their lives. They are adrenaline-addicted and only that sport can cheer them up. Despite the fact that sometimes they cannot comprehend the risks , I'm sure that

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's other activities even driving cannot be predicted.

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, in die hard 5 movies one of the most famous actors died, because of an accident. What I want to say is that

everyone

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's life is in danger if you do not be careful. To conclude,

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has the right to play whatever sports they want.

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, they should be allowed and aware to put themselves in a dangerous situation.

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, I believe that people have the right to do whatever they want.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

300 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

adrenaline rush
risk threshold
thrill-seeking
safety protocols
hazard assessment
adventure tourism
regulatory framework
personal autonomy
informed consent
risk mitigation strategies
thrill-seeking behavior
protective gear
extreme athleticism
freedom of choice
accident prevalence
emergency response
courage and resilience
endorphin release
legal implications
peer pressure effects

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