In education and employment, some people work harder than others. Why do some people work harder? Is it always a good thing to work hard?
A part of
people
works better than others in different spheres of life. There are some reasons of this
phenomenon. Partly it is going from the competition in our lives. In my view it is happening mostly due to
motivation, which can be various: money or career growth.
Firstly
, hard work
can make life better. Let’s take an ordinary high school student as an example. Everything start from our studying time. From childhood, we are taught that people
must study hard in order to get a good job and live in abundance. As a result
, after hard work
in school, then
in university, this
student will have the necessary skills to land your dream job that will lead him later to a life in good conditions.
In addition
, there are disadvantages in hard work
. For example
, our health. Working too hard, no matter where, in education or in employment, can cause huge damage to our health due to
pressure from other people
. The consequences of this
lifestyle: sleep disturbances, headaches and muscle pain, palpitations, weakness, depression, poor resistance to infections. If develop this
idea further
, it will be able to see a huge problem with socialization. If people
are always studying hard or working for a long time, they will not have a good relationship with others.
To summarize, it is evident that hard work
allows people
to achieve their career goals and earn more money. However
, in my opinion, working hard, neglecting one's health and family is never a risk worth taking.Submitted by rizamaliqyzy on
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