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In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #wiil #newspapers #books
There is no doubt that
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 online magazines have
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 impact on our lives regarding getting
information
. While some people believe that, people would not buy any printed sources to get
information
 in the future, others have
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 opposite opinion. I agree with the
first
 view and trying to explore the reasons in
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Firstly
, thinking about all
those
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information
 in the World, it is so
painfull
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painful
 to try to
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 that as books or magazines. Because every
physicall
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physical
 object
requares
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requires
a
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weight and space, and
that is
limittated
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limited
 our lives.
For example
, as a student I go
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collage
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college
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 with my pc which
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 me
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with everyting
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everyting
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everything
 that I have to learn
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 my lectures, I did not need to carry those heavy
boks
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books
.
Furthermore
, books are highly pricey these days, and open
sources
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websited
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website
websites
 constantly growing and populated.
Secondly
, our perspective on
information
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 dramatically according to
scientist
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scientists
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 because the habit of using social media
effects
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 our critical thinking and
the
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way of
communications
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. Thanks to the
improvment
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improvement
on
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telecomunications
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telecommunications
, newspapers and TV are no longer
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 only
realiable
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reliable
 sources for us, and
this
 leads to an empty space
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whose
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those
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want
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who want
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 to
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 their ideas.
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 they venture out their ideas easily
to
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using online platforms like blogs or social accounts, and become
a
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capable person
to
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in
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creating
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 an
audiance
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audience
 for themselves.
For instance
, a person does not need a
second
 person’s view to
getting
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get
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information
 about a scientific topic,
instead
 of checking websites or directly
contant
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content
contact
 with that
specilized
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specialised
scientisit
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scientist
scientists
 on that topic. In the conclusion,
altough
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although
 books and newspapers are good tools to informed
by
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, our vision
on
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of
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 the
information
 may have been changed and
this
 leads us to make new habits
as
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such as
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 using online platforms,
websited
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website
websites
web site
 and social accounts.
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