You have read a magasine article that mentionned a place you are familiar with There was a mistake in the article. Write a letter to the editor of the magasine and say what error was explain that you are familiar with the place wgy it is omportant to correct the error

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Dear Madame, Sir, I am writing referring to the article I saw on your magasine yesterday. The title was : Onnion, a tiny village in France. As I am curently living in

this

area, I was so surprise by

this

article. I mean, it is a great way for people to known more about

this

place.

Hence

the picture was incredible and represent so much the center of my hometown. Unfortunately, there were two mistaken informations about the village : Firslty, the brige was build in 1947 and not in 1984

also

, I firmly believe that for the lecturors it is best to have accurate informations. The

second

mistake was about the cycling competition wherein the author mentionne that

this

famous competition and the riders never ride throughout the village. In my opinion,

this

is two crucial informations about our town, adults and children are willing to visit after reading your paper. It will be for the best to correst those errors for economics reasons. One of the most important reason is that Onnion is a touristic area and people actually came by because of the old bridge and to follow the cycling competition. I look forward to hearing from you or to read the new article. Yours sincerely. Léa

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

10 paragraphs

210 words

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You have read a magasine article that mentionned a place you are familiar with There was a mistake in the article. Write a letter to the editor of the magasine and say what error was explain that you are familiar with the place wgy it is omportant to correct the error

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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