Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, a number of

people

think that

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History

is one of the most significant educational

subject

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, while others believe that, at the moment,

subject

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subjects

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with

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Science

and

Technology

are more vital than

History

. In my opinion, in modern

life

subjects

such

Science

and

Technology

are more important since they

are

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improve our

lifes

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lives

life

This

essay will examine both views. On the one hand,

History

plays an essential role for

people

Firstly

History

can save all information about human endeavour and several events which happened in the past.

For instance

, in today's world, we have a lot of information about culture, customs, events and great

people

. Please to

History

every country saved their identity.

Moreover

, we have many great

people

such

Einshtain

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Einstein

, Tesla,

Leonardo

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and Leonardo

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Da Vinci

whcih

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which

gave necessary

affect

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effect

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us. These legendary

people

created a multitude of

technology

and earned many scientific awards for their work.

Secondly

History

can teach

people

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not

repeat

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mistakes. Because we have a lot of examples of negative decisions.

For instance

, wars it is always wrong decisions since every

counrty

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country

can solve

this

problem with

bargain

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a bargain

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However

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personally agree that

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Science

and

Technology

are

important

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more important

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than

History

On the other hand

Science

and

History

give significant

devleopments

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developments

to our world. Because, please to

Science

and

Technology

we can create something new and make our

life

more convenient.

For instance

, if we compare modern

life

and

life

1000

year

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years

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ago, we can see

big

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a big

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difference.

However

this

difference

happened

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please to

Science

and

Technology

Therefore

, as we can see, these subject change and improve our

lifes

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lives

life

In addition

Science

and

Technology

are more

occuracy

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accuracy

than

History

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is not always true facts, whereas

science

always

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true facts.

Hence

, we can not believe everything from

History

. In conclusion,

Science

and

Technology

are more vital than

History

Science

and

Technology

give

big

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a big

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impact

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our

life

. So,

science

and

technology

are our future.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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