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In spite of advances in medicine, many people around the world still die of easily preventable diseases. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

#spite #advances #medicine #people #world #diseases #case
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 medicine,
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people around the world are still
dyeing
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dying
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 from easily preventable diseases.
This
 is a common case in undeveloped countries where the medical
system
 is corrupted and
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healthcare
 is not available for everyone.
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 controls in
medical
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institution
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, especially on the medical services in the public
healthcare
system
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is the best way to fight
this
 problem. The patients don’t trust the public
healthcare
system
 and the services they provide in
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 state like ours. Because it is an “open secret” that if you don’t have connections with the
healthcare
 workers or don’t offer a gift, the medical necessary doctors’ services you need will not be covered. In
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 50% of the patients are forced to go
in
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 private hospitals for medical treatments on easily prevented diseases but not everyone is in a situation to have
a
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private medical insurance. And there are many examples
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 people that didn’t receive
a
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basic medical care on time and
they
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 health
was compromise
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; in some cases, the ending was fatal. The government should control the work of the public
healthcare
system
 by making strict regulations
how
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this
system
 will work. It must have a
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