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The charts below give information about the changes in ownertship of electrical appliances and how much time spent doing housework in households in one country from 1920 to 2019.

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The charts below give information about the changes in
ownertship
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ownership
 of electrical appliances and how much time
spent
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was spent
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 doing
housework
 in households in one country from 1920 to 2019. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of all households with electrical appliances
are increase
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 for 100 years from 1920 to 2019.
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,
that
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the
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second
 chart shows the number of
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the house
a house
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house
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houses
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 if
housework
 per week, per
household
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,household
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is decrease
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is decreasing
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 from 1920 to 2019. With regard to households which has electrical appliances, washing machine is
most
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a most
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 increase in 3 kinds
if
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of
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macines
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machines
. In 1920, there is only 2~3 % but the percentage
were go
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 up to 100 % which is 50 times up.
Also
 in 1920, people spend 50 hours
to do
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housework
 in a week and it
was go
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went
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 down. In 2019, they spend time for
housework
 is only 10 hours which means there are decease
40
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than 40
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 hours for 100 years between 1920 to 2019.
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