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Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are losing the ability to communicate face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 modern era of globalization, due to advancements in science, numerous people are using electronic gadgets.
Although
 many may argue that, they are forgetting the skill of in-person communication. I completely disagree with
this
 view. My opinion is justified
further
. Out of all the arguments, the most vital aspect of technology is that it has given us the benefit of
video
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 to anyone at any
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 point
of
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 time.
That is
, helping individuals to communicate easily and quickly. A survey by times proved
this
 when COVID-19 was at
the
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 peak, most
of
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the
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software companies switched to remote
work
, and they started using applications like Teams or Slack.
In addition
 to
this
, it
allow
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 workers to
work
 and communicate
convienetly
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conveniently
confidently
 using devices due to
this
 most
of
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industries are still allowing
its
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 employees to
work
 from home.
Furthermore
, most
of
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studies
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the studies
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 at universities are held online using
Zoom
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 application, which gave the same in-class experience.
Moreover
, electronic gadget has allowed
worker
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 to
work
 effectively, which result
into
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increase
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 in revenue.
For example
, if a website or production server is down, employees can easily talk on
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phones
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 to solve
this
 fast.
Additionally
, numerous
peoples
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 and celebrities are preferring social
medias
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 to communicate as its more convenient and
gives
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 the same experience. To conclude, bearing in mind the above information and deliberating all facts, it can be deduced that online devices gave the same experience as in-person communication. I am of the opinion that technology has linked us like never before even in an unideal situation, at
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wor
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 or in our social lives
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  • erosion
  • interpersonal skills
  • overreliance
  • digital communication platforms
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • social bonds
  • enhance
  • bridging long distances
  • fostering connections
  • age groups
  • adept
  • integrating
  • landscape
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  • nuances
  • striking a balance
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