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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living . What is your opinion about this? What other times in history would be interesting to live in?

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In the modern
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, some people think the development and other
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 nowadays are the best days to spend their lifespans.
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 essay will discuss my opinion, and other times in the past, that would interesting to live before arriving at a conclusion. In my opinion, I strongly believe
time
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 to
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world
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 is been getting changed.
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 in each subject are developing
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, scientists and researchers mostly focus on a better life for human beings.
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, the data related to childbirth and deaths gradually decreases annually. That implies the
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 is positively developing for the better side.
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 the present
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 is better than the past.
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, better will come in the future than in the present.
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, when more focus is on the
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, the Lord Buddha lived, would be interesting to live in.
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, at that
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 religion was perfect even the rulers controlled their countries to the facts from the religion. Even more consider the ruins of past buildings, temples, rivers, and lakes in many countries imply the technological architecture facility, town and country planning at that
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. Scientists named their wonders,
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, Sigiriya which is a rock fortress built in ancient times the organization of the plans of
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 in that ruins could impress the services offered at that
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 perfectly. In conclusion,
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 and researchers in each field are going uprise
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 to
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. Due to that future will be better than the present.
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, the technology used in parts that indicate the living quality is
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 perfect
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 and would be interesting to live in that particular
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.
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