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Some people argue that mass media only bring negative effect to society and should be banned. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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One of the heated issues nowadays is how the public is negatively influenced by the
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. The excessively uneducated content presented to society via television, radio, and newspapers
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 damaging consequences for everyone. Not only that but
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 heavily biased press have the potential to make an unstable political climate in the country. To reduce them, people contend that conservative
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 use of it should be prohibited. Communication
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 provides uninformative and uneducated content to the public. The ultimate goal of mass
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 nowadays is to pursue profit but forget that the function of broadcasting is to provide reliable content to the public. Using clickbait, provide almost the same information but with different headlines or provide the same information 3 times a day.
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, mass
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 work the old-school way which does not try to innovate. Heavily biased mass
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 have the potential to make an unstable political climate in the country because it is a business that plays a big role to lead public opinion, especially in politics. Take the Indonesian presidential election 2019 as an ultimate example of how biased information divides the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Mass media
  • Public opinion
  • Sensationalism
  • Misinformation
  • Consumerism
  • Intellectual pursuits
  • Free speech
  • Unsustainable consumption
  • Hysteria
  • Social change
  • Regulation
  • Pervasiveness
  • Materialism
  • Political outcomes
  • Distortion of truth
  • Advocacy
  • Civic engagement
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