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Some people think that government should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In the modern world, communication is easier than before. It argued a few people that more investment is necessary to develop an advanced rail transportation system whereas the other public feels that it is important to improve bus service. I support the notion regarding railway systems. In
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 topic. On the one hand, the train is not only good as public transport but
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 carries business products from one city to another irrespective to distance.
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, in many areas of the world, it is possible to reach by rail where other transport
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 as bus and air travel is not available.
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, remote territories in Russia are undercover snow most of the time of the year where railways play an important role.
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 some countries have hilly areas difficult to communicate with these systems.
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, Afghanistan and Bhutan in southeast Asia face these problems.
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, Bus transportation is very popular with people, especially for a short
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. It is always available so unlike a train service, it doesn't follow a schedule that's why waiting time is less. Most of the countries of the world have nice road communication. For illustration, European States have more well-organized highways and streets than Asian countries. In conclusion, it is said that to achieve a better transportation system government should take a quick response and invest money to give priority to the public interest. By doing these, lawmakers can reach a goal for the establishment of a better society.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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