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Some people believe that cell phone should be for personal use only others however feel cell phones should be used mostly for work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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In
this
 modern era, mobile
phone
 become more common,
,
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however
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 it is really dangerous in some ways, so
for
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,that we must be careful when using them.Some people believe that using a
cell
phone
 for
work
 is not suitable and make a
lot
 of problems.On the other ,hand some claim that to have a good business
cell
phone
 must be in your hand and used at your
work
 .
My
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In my
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 opinion, I will discuss both views because they may both have the same truth.
Firstly
, people who see
cell
phones
 as only for personal
use
,
that
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 really works for some professions,
such
 as doctors, nurses , teachers and a
lot
 of different jobs.
For example
. you can not call a doctor while he has a patient and he needs
fouce
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force
focus
 and privacy.
Besides
 that, the doctor can not call the patient and give him drugs on a
cell
phone
, the patient should be in the clinic to see the doctor. In
this
example
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cell
phone
use
 is not perfect and may cause a
lot
 of harm to
business
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the business
a business
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.
Secondly
, there are some jobs that need
a
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the
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use
 of
cell
phones
 their
work
 and if they do not
use
 them the business may not move forward.
For example
, call centres in big companies that need to call customers in their homes or
work
 to show them offers.In countries where they
use
a
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cell phones
a cell phone
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cell
phones
in
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the
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,
work
 some studies prove that
workers
 become more productive in
the
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show a
lot
 of achievement.Where
this
 rate fell down in the companies not allowing
workers
 to
use
cell
phones
.So
this
 should take advantage of more studies to allow
workers
 to
use
cell
phones
. To sum up, using
cell
phones
 should be allowed at
work
 for some
workers
 in particularly parents and students who
work
 part-time.,
However
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 it must be not long just several minutes.The government can make a contribution to the solution and support laws to benefit the worker and the owners.
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