Some people believe that cell phone should be for personal use only others however feel cell phones should be used mostly for work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
In
this
modern era, mobile phone
become more common, ,
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however
it is really dangerous in some ways, soAdd the comma(s)
,however
for
,that we must be careful when using them.Some people believe that using a Change preposition
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cell
phone
for work
is not suitable and make a lot
of problems.On the other ,hand some claim that to have a good business cell
phone
must be in your hand and used at your work
.My
opinion, I will discuss both views because they may both have the same truth.
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Firstly
, people who see cell
phones
as only for personal use
, that
really works for some professions, Correct pronoun usage
which
such
as doctors, nurses , teachers and a lot
of different jobs.For example
. you can not call a doctor while he has a patient and he needs fouce
and privacy.Correct your spelling
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focus
Besides
that, the doctor can not call the patient and give him drugs on a cell
phone
, the patient should be in the clinic to see the doctor. In this
example
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,example
cell
phone
use
is not perfect and may cause a lot
of harm to business
.
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the business
a business
Secondly
, there are some jobs that need a
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the
use
of cell
phones
their work
and if they do not use
them the business may not move forward.For example
, call centres in big companies that need to call customers in their homes or work
to show them offers.In countries where they use
a
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cell phones
a cell phone
cell
phones
in
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the
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work
some studies prove that workers
become more productive in the
show a Correct article usage
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lot
of achievement.Where this
rate fell down in the companies not allowing workers
to use
cell
phones
.So this
should take advantage of more studies to allow workers
to use
cell
phones
.
To sum up, using cell
phones
should be allowed at work
for some workers
in particularly parents and students who work
part-time.,However
it must be not long just several minutes.The government can make a contribution to the solution and support laws to benefit the worker and the owners.Add the comma(s)
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