Some people believe that cell phone should be for personal use only others however feel cell phones should be used mostly for work. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In
this
modern era, mobile
phone
become more common,
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however
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it is really dangerous in some ways, so
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,that we must be careful when using them.Some people believe that using a
cell
phone
for
work
is not suitable and make a
lot
of problems.On the other ,hand some claim that to have a good business
cell
phone
must be in your hand and used at your
work
.
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opinion, I will discuss both views because they may both have the same truth.
Firstly
, people who see
cell
phones
as only for personal
use
,
that
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really works for some professions,
such
as doctors, nurses , teachers and a
lot
of different jobs.
For example
. you can not call a doctor while he has a patient and he needs
fouce
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force
focus
and privacy.
Besides
that, the doctor can not call the patient and give him drugs on a
cell
phone
, the patient should be in the clinic to see the doctor. In
this
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cell
phone
use
is not perfect and may cause a
lot
of harm to
business
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the business
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.
Secondly
, there are some jobs that need
a
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use
of
cell
phones
their
work
and if they do not
use
them the business may not move forward.
For example
, call centres in big companies that need to call customers in their homes or
work
to show them offers.In countries where they
use
a
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cell phones
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cell
phones
in
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the
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,
work
some studies prove that
workers
become more productive in
the
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show a
lot
of achievement.Where
this
rate fell down in the companies not allowing
workers
to
use
cell
phones
.So
this
should take advantage of more studies to allow
workers
to
use
cell
phones
. To sum up, using
cell
phones
should be allowed at
work
for some
workers
in particularly parents and students who
work
part-time.,
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it must be not long just several minutes.The government can make a contribution to the solution and support laws to benefit the worker and the owners.
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