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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Buying locally grown products is becoming more popular
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these days. I believe that it is
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 development that benefits consumers and economies respectively One of the major
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 why it is a positive development is that increases
food
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 industry
companies
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 income worldwide .Consumers can find
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 of goods which are imported from all over
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 from markets and grocery stores.
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, demand for produced
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 increases trade and provides income opportunities for producers globally
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, Produced
food
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 in supermarkets
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 beneficial for consumers because of several reasons/factors.
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 are affordable and time
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 for all
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 of clients
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 as students and employees. Because they have no time to grow goods by themselves
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hectic
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life style
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. So they can just buy and prepare
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easily
 anytime. In conclusion, Produced
food
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 makes
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life
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lives
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 easier and develops business opportunities in
food
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 supply chains

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The introduction could benefit from being more detailed and clearly stating both viewpoints—positive and negative—regarding the availability of globally produced food in supermarkets. This would provide a balanced introduction to the essay.
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Ensure each paragraph has a clear main point that directly relates to the essay prompt. The first paragraph, for instance, should focus more on how global food availability affects local consumers and economies.
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Provide specific examples to support your main points. For instance, mention specific types of food that are popular and beneficial when imported, or specify regions that benefit economically.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. At times, the essay reads a bit disjointed. Using transitional phrases can help connect ideas better and guide the reader through your argument.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion is concise, but could be more detailed by briefly summarizing the main points discussed and reaffirming your stance more strongly.
coherence cohesion
There needs to be better integration of ideas and themes throughout the essay. Ensure that each paragraph builds on the previous one, maintaining a consistent and logical progression of ideas. For instance, after discussing the economic benefits in one paragraph, you can transition to how these economic benefits translate into consumer advantages.
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The essay addresses the prompt, focusing on the accessibility of globally produced food in supermarkets and its impacts.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion summarizes the main idea effectively and reiterates the overall positive impact.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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