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Some people believe that governments should spend on new public buildings, such as libraries and museums, rather than renovating old buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that government should allocate their budget to building new public
buildings
instead
 of renovating the old
buildings
. From my point of view, I completely agree with
this
 view for several reasons. There are several reasons why the authority should not spend money on renovating old public
buildings
. The
first
 reason is that it is not suitable to restore an old building in modern cities in the long term because the city needs modern and picturesque
building
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such
 as high-rise
buildings
, and skyscrapers. Take Seoul in Korea as an example, most of
public
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 building in
this
 city has an ultra-modern look, which makes Seoul more beautiful and more attractive. Another point is that reusing
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old architecture takes more time than building
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new one because designers need to know clearly about the old
buildings
 in order to make a design of the building base on the old architecture. I believe that
government’s
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 budget should go to new
buildings
 because of several reasons. Chief among these is that new building is more durable because nowadays there are many
advance
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 materials for construction
such
 as
new
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 form of concrete, and composite materials , which can increase the duration of
buildings
. The
second
 reason is that new architecture may enhance citizens’ satisfaction because when the government builds new public
buildings
, they can go for smart
buildings
, which can apply new technologies. These smart
buildings
 have breathtaking appearances and smart technology, which will make cities more modern and more attractive. In conclusion, there are many benefits to spending on new public
buildings
 in terms of duration, and satisfaction of inhabitants.
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