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The bar charts illustrate the amount of four different forms of
waste
; paper, glass, tins and
garden
 measured in
tons
, collected by a recycling company within a 5 years
period
. Overall, it can be seen that over the
period
, asides from 2013, there were similar patterns of distribution of all wastes and 2015 had the highest
waste
 collection.
Although
, papers
was
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 the most cycled by the company each year meanwhile it was the opposite for
garden
waste
. In 2011, paper stood as the most collected
waste
 at 57
tons
. Over the
next
 two years, it saw a progressive decrease to 40
tons
 in 2013 after which it took a turn and rose sharply to an all-time high of 70
tons
 by the end of the
period
. It was almost a simulation trend for glass
waste
. It started the
period
 at about 10
tons
 lesser than paper and continued until 2013 when it overtook the other three
waste
 to become the highest for the year at 48
tons
. It
further
 decline slightly to 46
tons
 in 2015
then
 saw a moderate increase to end the
period
 at 52
tons
. The remaining two; tins and
garden
, were the least collected
waste
. They maintained a difference of about 4 to 5
tons
 all through.
However
, the only odd distribution was in 2012 when
garden
Waste
 was 12
tons
 lesser than tins.
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