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Newspapers and books are out-dated. Why do some people believe this? What is your opinion about the future of books and newspapers? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#newspapers #books #people #future #answers
It has been argued by few that newspapers and
books
 are
boring
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way
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 to enhance knowledge. From
this
 point of view, it is obvious that the percentage of these sources will
be
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decline
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a decline
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 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 years.
This
 essay will discuss the issue, and I will state my opinion
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 a reasonable conclusion.
To begin
 with, nowadays, people are getting habitual to use technology and they tend to read everything
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internet
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the internet
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.
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 of
population
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the population
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 thinks that it is
wastes
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waste
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 of money to read paper
besed
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based
 material as they already have cell phones and laptops to get information.
Furthermore
, they think that it is
wastes
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waste
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 of time because from the
books
 they have to read everything but from
the
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e-
books
 or interest they can just read the important stuff.
For example
: if a student is preparing for
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exams
then
books
 take too much time because they have to read everything but on the internet
that
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they
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 can just type their question and get their answer. According to me,
as
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 the increased number of technical objects,
the
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books
 and newspapers will completely
declined
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decline
be declined
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 one day.
Although
 some old aged person read
the
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history or regional
books
but
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the new generation
don't
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. In conclusion, in the upcoming time, the
books
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number of books
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 will
decreased
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.
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