In some societies it is increasingly common to try to achieve good health and fitness through physically demanding sports, special diets, or preventative medicine conventional or alternative. Some people, however, believe that the best way to stay fit and healthy is simply to lead a normal life. To what extent do you agree and disagree with this opinion?

Unquestionably,
health
is pivotal and invaluable.
People
might maintain their
health
through excessive sports, food
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, and medicine. Another belief is that some
people
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method particularly normal life in their lifespan. I firmly agree with
this
latter notion, and my opinion will be discussed in
further
paragraphs with a sensible conclusion.
First
of all, there are several simple ways to be healthy in everyday life, including
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might
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do not
strenuous
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routine
activity
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. In
this
circumstance, all
people
might simply go jogging to take care of
health
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.
For instance
,
people
want to jog in the morning because the air is still fresh and the sunlight is rich in vitamins
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the skin and
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.
As a result
,
this
activity could keep
people
healthy without doing severe exercises.
Furthermore
, healthy food is well-consumed
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to food containing nutrition, vitamins, and protein. Having a simple lifestyle is workable
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every day like
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enough,
usually
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people
sleep about six to eight hours per day and eat regularly.
In other words
,
people
must be balanced with their needs so that
people
have well-being in a normal lifestyle.
For example
, some
people
have habitual
action
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like breakfast and if
people
do not eat in the morning
then
they will get sick.
As a result
,
balanced
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diet both equal and equitable ought to
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and right so that
people
in the lifespan will lead to
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and longevity. To conclude,
although
people
have to think more adequately about their
health
,
neither
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exercise regularly nor regulate their natural life.
However
, it will depend upon the
people
’s mindsets and which view they favour.
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