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Many things that use to be done in the home by hand are now being done by the machines. Does this development bring more advantage or disadvantage

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It is commonly said that today more things that
use
 to be done in the home by hand.
However
, nowadays they are being done by
machines
. While there are serious negative opinions of
this
 development, I would argue that the advantages of
this
 are outweighed the disadvantages. These advantages are twofold. On the one hand, in previous years,
people
 used to write with their hands. Because they did not have any digital
machines
. The
people
 wrote emails by their hands to post. If they need some pieces of information they used emails.
Furthermore
, they communicated with their relatives or friends by letters if they were abroad.
On the other hand
, nowadays more and more
people
use
 different
machines
 to communicate or get other news compared to before.
For instance
, today's children and most
people
use
 phones for a lot of reasons. I personally believe that phones or laptops are becoming the most important things in our modern life. Because they are easy and comfortable to
use
.
Moreover
,
people
 can communicate with loved ones easier and faster by phone rather mail. Nowadays,
people
 do not need to wait to reach their news with others. They need only the internet to send news. Way of my conclusion, I reiterate my position that nowadays many things are being done by
machines
. And it has a lot of conveniences rather than in the past. I believe that the benefits of using digital
machines
 are greater than the drawbacks. I am sure most
people
 would agree with
this
 situation.
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