Nowadays many people have an unhealthy diet and do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons behind this trend? How we can encourage these people to live a health life.

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consuming unhealthy foods and do not
exercise
regularly are issues that many
people
concern
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in
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a
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present day. I will discuss why
this
is the case and will suggest some practical solutions. One of the major issues is that there are a number of
restaurants
that provide delicious tastes,
however
, unhealthy for life.
For
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example
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,
those
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are fast food, BBQ and Shabu ; MC Donalds, KFC, Burger King, and Momo. I
also
had a burger at Burger King with my
colleages
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colleagues
for lunch yesterday because the restaurant is easy to find and
foods
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the foods
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are delicious and easy to grab. In order to tackle
this
problem,
government
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the government
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should do something to ensure the healthy lifestyle of
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the citizen
a citizen
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citizen
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.
First
of all, most of these
restaurants
are imported from other countries.
For instance
,
United
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States of America,
United
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the United
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Kingfom
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Kingdom
and
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the Japanese
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Japanese
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.
Therefore
,
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the governement
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governement
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government
should
increase
tax
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taxes
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on imported
restaurants
. Another concern is
people
do not work out regularly.
This
is because they have a lot of
works
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work
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and could not allocate their time
on
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to
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exercise
. They may
earning
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little money from their jobs.
As a result
, they have to do many works to live their life.
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, Thailand is known as a
low cost of living
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country for foreigners,
however
, when
comparing
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compared
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to Thai citizens, our standard income could not effort a basic lifestyle. Having a meal
on
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shopping malls is
such
a special event. The effective solution
is
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for
government
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the government
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is
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to
increase
people
's standard income. Once,
our
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finanical
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financially
stable, we could have time to do many things like
exercise
. In conclusion,
this
essay examines two reasons why
people
eat unhealthy food and do not work out regularly; there are a number of unhealthy
restaurants
and
people
could not allocate their time
on
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to
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exercise
due to
hard working
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hard-working
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lifestyle. To tackle the
first
, the solution is for
government
to
increase
the tax
of
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on
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imported
restaurants
. To address the latter, it is advised that
government
should
increase
people
's standard income.
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