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Nowadays many people have an unhealthy diet and do not exercise regularly. What are the reasons behind this trend? How we can encourage these people to live a health life.

citizen
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citizens
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 consuming unhealthy foods and do not
exercise
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 regularly are issues that many
people
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concern
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in
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about in
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a
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the
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 present day. I will discuss why
this
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 is the case and will suggest some practical solutions. One of the major issues is that there are a number of
restaurants
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 that provide delicious tastes,
however
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, unhealthy for life.
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example
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,
those
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apply
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are fast food, BBQ and Shabu ; MC Donalds, KFC, Burger King, and Momo. I
also
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 had a burger at Burger King with my
colleages
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colleagues
 for lunch yesterday because the restaurant is easy to find and
foods
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the foods
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 are delicious and easy to grab. In order to tackle
this
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 problem,
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government
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the government
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 should do something to ensure the healthy lifestyle of
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the citizen
a citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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.
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 of all, most of these
restaurants
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 are imported from other countries.
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,
United
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the United
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 States of America,
United
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the United
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Kingfom
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Kingdom
 and
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the Japanese
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Japanese
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Japan
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.
Therefore
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,
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the governement
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governement
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government
 should
increase
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tax
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taxes
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 on imported
restaurants
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. Another concern is
people
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 do not work out regularly.
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 is because they have a lot of
works
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work
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 and could not allocate their time
on
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to
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exercise
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. They may
earning
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earn
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 little money from their jobs.
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, they have to do many works to live their life.
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, Thailand is known as a
low cost of living
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low-cost-of-living
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 country for foreigners,
however
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, when
comparing
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compared
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 to Thai citizens, our standard income could not effort a basic lifestyle. Having a meal
on
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in
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 shopping malls is
such
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 a special event. The effective solution
is
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for
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government
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the government
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is
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to
increase
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people
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's standard income. Once,
our
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we
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finanical
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financially
 stable, we could have time to do many things like
exercise
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. In conclusion,
this
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 essay examines two reasons why
people
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 eat unhealthy food and do not work out regularly; there are a number of unhealthy
restaurants
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 and
people
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 could not allocate their time
on
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to
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exercise
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 due to
hard working
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hard-working
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 lifestyle. To tackle the
first
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, the solution is for
government
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 to
increase
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 the tax
of
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on
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 imported
restaurants
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. To address the latter, it is advised that
government
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 should
increase
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people
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's standard income.

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