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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this. To what extend do you agree or disagree? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. Write at least 250 words.

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The data illustrates the
students
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 proportions of four types of secondary school in three periods of
year
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 (2000, 2005, and 2009). The Secondary
schools
 were categorized
by
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 Specialist
Schools
, Grammar
Schools
, Voluntary-controlled
Schools
, and Community
Schools
. At
first
 glance, the number of
the
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pupils
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pupil's
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 attendance dropped slowly over the timeframe.
However
, The Community
Schools
 expand over the end of periods. There
were
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a dramatical
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dramatical
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 fall
of
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 numerous school
pupils
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 visitation throughout the timeframe at three institutions. Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 became the most institution plunged which stood at 52% in 2000. Not only jumped to 38% in 2005
,
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 but
also
 to 20 % in 2009. Followed by Grammar
Schools
 that dropped a half
attandance
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attendance
 (twelve
percentage
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) in 2009 than in 2000 (24%). Whereas Specialist
Schools
 did not particularly
changed
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. Despite that, it hit a low of numbers at 10% in 2009.
In contrast
, The Community
Schools
,
stood
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 at 12% in 2000 and increased
a
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fifth in 2015, became popular among children
in
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 the end of
period
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. In
additionally
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, it was the highest visitor of the four
schools
 which was reaching a peak of 58% in 2019.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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