To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

As the population are still growing rapidly,
foods
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supply
have
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became
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an important issue that needs to be solved. Countries' governments suggest
that
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using
insects
as a source to produce
foods
.
However
, people have different
prospectives
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on insect
foods
. Here are my opinions about using
insects
to make
foods
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.
Acorrding
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According
to
a
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scientific research that I accessed while doing my school project, there are many
benifits
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benefits
of eating
insects
.
To begin
with, some
insects
have more
protiens
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proteins
protein
than the same amount of meat that you consume, which can make the consumer feel full after only eating a few of them.
In addition
, the population of
insects
are much more than the population of
the
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edible animals.
Furthermore
, the reproduction speed of the
insects
are
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significanly
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significantly
more
effecient
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efficient
than the speed of the edible animals, as
insects
can give birth to 100 baby
insects
at once while the animals can only normally give birth
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to one digit. There are
also
downsides
of
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eating
insects
.
Firstly
, eating
insects
might cause a huge impact
to
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the food chain, which might make the other creatures experience starvation and even
further
cause
extintions
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extinctions
to the creatures.
Secondly
, there are not enough
statistic
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proving that eating bugs will not have
long term
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effects
to
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the human
bodies
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, whereas people are eating
meats
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for hundreds of thousands of years, letting us know that eating meat won't affect our bodies.
Finally
, bugs are too small,
which
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we might require to eat a considerable amount of them at once to feel full. In conclusion, despite the fact that there are some downsides, they are not unsolvable.
Therefore
, I believe that it will be
a
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excellent solution
for
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the lacking of food supply.
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