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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is argued that by some
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 listening to
music
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 is known as a good method of gathering different age groups and cultures of
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, while others have different points of view. I personally agree with the former idea. On the one hand, some
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 think that listening to
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 is not a good idea for
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 aim. In different societies where there is a range of variety of age groups, each of them has a musical taste.
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, in some countries teenagers or younger
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 usually listen to energetic
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 while adults prefer to listen to lighter
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 like traditional or classical.
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, these type of difference leads to avoiding bringing
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 together.
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, there are some reasons why others and I believe that
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 can represent a
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 of a society.
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 and foremost is that the
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 and its lyrics convey a message about the
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 of that age.
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, a Canadian individual who is interested in Persian
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 can be familiar with it by listening to Iranian
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, especially the traditional type because huge numbers of lyrics of
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 type of
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 have been gotten from one of the world-famous literature books that its name is called "Shahnameh" due to
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 book has rich content about the Iranian lifestyle, social conditions, relationships, love, and personalities of that time. To sum up, in my opinion, there are some reasons why
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 can bring
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 together who have different cultures. The reason
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 as representing
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 in the lyrics of
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 is one of the prominent causes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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