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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools . others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Dicuss both view views and give your own opinion.

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The diagram illustrates information about what the Australian youths preferred consuming in a space of 15 years. Overall,
fish
 and
chips
 were consumed by many teenagers at the beginning of the period under review though at the end it was the least bought.
To begin
 with, pizza was purchased by few people in 1975 with just less than 10 buying, the figure increased steadily in the
next
 2 decades up to over 80. It remained constant at 85 until 2000. In 1990 there was a crossroads between pizza consumption and,
fish
 and
chips
.
However
, while the number of
fish
 and
chips
 dropped drastically, those of pizza were shooting up. Coming to hamburgers, the figure for buyers was low in 1975, though in the following decade, the number rose significantly to over 80. After 1980, there was a slow rise which ended constant at approximately 100 in 2000.
Furthermore
,
fish
 and
chips
 were eaten by many teenagers in the
first
 months of 1975. In the
next
 decade, the number of consumers dropped and picked and
then
 fell drastically from just below 100 to less than 40 in 2000 which made it to be the least bought in that year.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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