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Some people believe that public celebrations like national days and festivals are a waste of money. They are of the opinion that people should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree? Support your arguments with examples from your own experience.

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National days or festivals hold an important role in the life of any society and figure prominently in the yearly calendar. Some justify spending on them while others differ and opine in favour of spending towards something more relevant and important. I strongly support spending on festivities and my essay will elucidate the same with relevant examples.
Firstly
, festivities are in themselves an occasion of joy and bring much-needed happiness to
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public. In a world which is under increasing pressure of performance,
such
 occasions bring the scope of relief and cherish one's cultural roots.
Additionally
, public celebrations magnify the extent of enjoyment and provide value-based education to the population. For an instance, public spending on festivals in India like Diwali and Durgapuja has clearly ensured equal participation for all sections of the community irrespective of their religion and financial candour.
Secondly
, national days work as an instant reminder of the achievement of a nation particularly, in terms of important national or political milestones.
Moreover
, public spending not only ensures that they are always at the top of the mind but it obviously teaches the future generation about its continued relevance and stature. Nothing can be more unfortunate than a race forgetting its achievement due to the lapse of time.
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, countries like India which have gained freedom from colonial rule commemorate national days like independence day reminding the nation of the supreme sacrifices made towards it. It can be conclusively said that public spending on national events and festivals is not only justified but clearly has a role in preserving ethnic identity owing to its benefits. It keeps public memory refreshed and cherishes the virtues for which the nation or tribe stands for.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public celebrations,
  • Foster,
  • National identity,
  • Societal bonds,
  • Cultural heritage,
  • Economic stimulus,
  • Tourism,
  • Revenue,
  • Seasonal employment,
  • Educational opportunities,
  • Tradition,
  • Mental health,
  • Well-being,
  • Misallocation of resources,
  • Public services,
  • Inclusivity,
  • Environmental impact,
  • Littering,
  • Pollution,
  • Carbon footprint,
  • Cost-effective,
  • Community-driven
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