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some people believe that museums and historical places should be free of charge, while others think that visitors should pay to visit them. what is your opinion?

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 some assume that it is more advisable that
visitors
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 do not pay any
money
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 to
visit
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museums
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 and ancient areas, others hold the view that they ought to have entry fees for
visitors
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. I do believe that
people
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 had better give
money
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 to see these areas. some argue that
museums
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 and monument regions do not have entry costs to make the public eager to
visit
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 them. to illustrate
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more, some
people
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 are reluctant to
visit
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 these valuable and instructive areas as thinking they are too boring. by making them free of charge, yet, we can motivate
people
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 to
visit
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 them and discover the beauty and originality that they possess.
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,
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 is a viable way to inspire the population to see these locations. others are of the view that these precious sites had better not be free to able authorities to afford the cost of their maintenance.
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, we have to protect and conserve them in various circumstances. when the weather is freezy or rainy cats and dogs should provide protective awnings so maintaining the structure of
museums
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 requires some facilities.
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, taking
money
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 from anyone who wants to see them can help the authorities to pay their maintenance costs. I believe that as the economy of some countries
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relying on tourism so it can improve their economical status. to put it simply, these monuments and marvellous buildings reflect our worth civilization and nationality which absorbs
visitors
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 to
visit
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 our country. it means that they pay taxes, hotel prices, and the cost of food in restaurants so
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 flow of
money
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 contributes to promoting the local economy,
as a result
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 taking
money
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 to let
people
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visit
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 them can have plus points in
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 regard. to sum up, giving
money
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 with regards to allowing
visitors
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 to witness
museums
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 and old regions has several benefits like promoting the economy and affording their protection.
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, if they are free of charge can pave the way for
people
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 to come and
visit
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 them.

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