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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intellegent robots. What is your opinion ?

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Some individuals claim that all work will be implemented by what we call artificially
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intellegent
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intelligent
robots
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 in the future. In my perspective,
these kind
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 of tools will not be
alternative
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substitute
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 for
human
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 workforce but in case it happens, there will be
high
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 unemployment rate of professional people in certain job spheres.
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intellegent
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intelligent
robots
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 will not replace people's
role
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 in
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certain working environment. Personally, I believe that artificially
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intellegent
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intelligent
 machines can not be
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 substitute in the role human workforce. Considering
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, the machines operated by artificial
intellegence
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intelligence
 can be broken down in the middle of the work process. For
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,
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 month, I visited
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 beer manufacturing company and witnessed that the company was experiencing
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 technical issue in terms of its bottle washing machine.
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 the workflow stopped and considerable delay posed in the beer production system until the mechanics come and fix the machine. In case artificially
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intellegent
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intelligent
robots
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 are introduced to all
jobs'
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system
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, the special experts will be faded in every job sphere. Because, these days every sphere is managed by its special, cognitive, comprehensive and reliable specialists. My uncle
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example
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 was working in the car factory as a welder and earning
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 salary for his family. Recently, that factory
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introduced
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artificial welding
robots
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 into
production
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 system which led my uncle to be unemployed even
if
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 he is an expert in welding. Concluding my long-lasted essay, artificially
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intellegent
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intelligent
robots
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 can not be
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of
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human
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 workforce as it is dependent on
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certain factors. If
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it
come
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 true, experts will be faded
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the
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their working sphere like my uncle.
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