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The users of social media, such as Facebook, Twitter, are replacing face-to-face contact in this century. Do you think the advantages of this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is a fact that people are using social media to communicate with each other, more than ever before.
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 the advance of technology texting and video-chatting have almost replaced face-to-face contact.
This
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 phenomenon has created a debate on whether the replacement of ways of communication has more advantages than disadvantages for humans.
Firstly
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, some people argue that communicating through social media has many advantages and
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 is preferable since it can help individuals interact without them being in the same location.
For instance
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, friends and family members can check on each other anywhere in the world using technology.
This
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 positive attribute is very important considering that in the past, decades individuals could wait for years to contact their loved ones because they were living in different countries.
To conclude
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, contact via the
internet
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 has no limits
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 respect
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 distance and can be very useful.
On the other hand
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, a large portion of the population claims that over-using smartphones to keep in touch underly an important drawback. People have forgotten how to meet and spend time in real life.
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, it is observed that teenagers do not hang out after school.
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 prefer to meet virtually in group chats. That has a negative impact on their social life growing up and many times stress having real bonds with other humans. So, unarguably social media have created a trend where face-to-face communication is absent.
To sum up
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, human connection has been improved with the use of technology but there is a trend to overuse
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 tool even in situations where it is not needed.
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, modern ways of communication have been proven very convenient and sometimes even necessary, so I personally believe that the positives clearly outweigh the drawbacks in
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 debate.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve logical structure.
task achievement
Include a clearer stance on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages to improve task response.

Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhanced connectivity
  • geographical barriers
  • maintaining relationships
  • valuable tool
  • staying informed
  • global issues
  • current events
  • niche topics
  • professional networking
  • career growth
  • business opportunities
  • mental health challenges
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • feelings of loneliness
  • over-reliance
  • face-to-face interactions
  • social skills
  • emotional intelligence
  • privacy concerns
  • data security
  • personal information
  • accessed and misused
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