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Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today, we are seeing more and more colleges have started to adopt remote learning schemes. While some
people
 prefer studying remotely, I am all for the view that attending
college
 on-site still has advantages not achievable from a long
distance
. Admittedly, there are several reasons why
distance
 education is becoming more prevalent in universities. One could be the convenience and flexible time management it offers are in line with
college
 students’ requirements to free up time for internships, volunteering, and other off-campus activities while managing a demanding course load at university. That said, I would like to argue that taking
college
 courses in person can stand out in several ways.
Firstly
, offline learning schemes provide
people
 with vast opportunities for physical contact.
People
 apply to universities aiming for academic excellence and sophisticated interpersonal skills for future careers.
For example
, offline communications can be more intimate and spontaneous when you meet like-minded
people
 from other majors and are willing to add them to your professional network in the future.
In contrast
, virtual classrooms tend to lack social components in every aspect when class attendants can only communicate remotely via the internet.
Secondly
, many disciplines,
such
 as engineering, architecture, and construction, involve extensive technical workshops not able to be achieved online.
For instance
, students from civil engineering often need to complete varied practical programs throughout their
college
 education, consisting of a wide range of technical tasks based on teamwork, let alone advice and supervision of assistants. There isn’t doubt that
distance
 education schemes solely cannot meet all these requirements of a teamwork environment and workshop tools and needed facilities. In conclusion,
although
 the trend towards
distance
 courses at university seems firm and irreversible, I would argue that it will not completely stop
people
 from physically attending
college
.
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