Some people believe that women should be able to join their country’s army and police forces. Others think that only men should be allowed to work in these areas. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many individuals claim that ladies are able to join their nation's forces. But others reject
this
notion and believe that girls are not eligible for
this
kind of
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. In my, opinion the position of
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in country
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appears to be more rational and
this
will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriads of reasons which will
further
explain
this
argument but the most preponderant fact is western countries are facing
shortage
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a shortage
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of the population, for , example in Syria, Israel, and, South Korea females join
army
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the army
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and police forces because
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government is mandatory
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all pupils. Another pivotal aspect is most of the weapons are light weights ,
Therefore
, ladies use
it
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efficiently. Moving
further
, it is pertinent to mention that the article published in the eminent newspaper Hindustan Times depicts that in the war of
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- Ukraine,
womens
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women
play a vital role owing to
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of the males
are
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deid
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denied
did
dead
initially
.
Furthermore
, males have less amiable compare to feminine.
However
, there are some pitfalls that negate these arguments and which can certainly overwhelm the potential influence of
this
trend.
Although
, the most alarming one is
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physical potential is
mighty
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rather than girls.
Besides
, massive assault
such
as AK47, and, AK56 is too heavy, maybe it is challenging for
womens
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women
women's
to carry
on
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shoulders
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to
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24 hours.
Moreover
, a survey conducted by the prestigious university Oxford in London revealed most of the
failure
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in wars cause
to
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women due to
have
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minute skills for, instance leadership, and,
decision making
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.
Similarly
, cruelty to ladies
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increasing by leaps and bounds in
war
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the war
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field. To sum up, according to the argument aforementioned above, one can reach the conclusion, that the perks of the girls in war are instrumental indeed. The potential drawbacks should not be overlooked either.
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