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Write about the following topic. Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Metropolitan
areas
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 around the world are developing rapidly and more
people
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 are moving towards these
areas
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 to spend their lives since there are more luxurious accommodations, job opportunities, and other facilities.
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, a majority of
people
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 believe that living in a compound
city
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 makes their health deteriorate. I partially agree with the above mention statement and the following essay will
further
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 elaborate with examples. Commencing, it is widely accepted that living in
cities
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 brings numerous health-related issues for
people
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.
Firstly
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 because of vehicle congestion in the heart of the
city
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.
People
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 use personal vehicles
instead
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 of public transport which combusts a large number of harmful gases into the air and
this
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 air is inhaled by individuals residing in
cities
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.
Secondly
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, urban
areas
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 are crowded with
people
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, and numerous viruses are spreading overnight so the percentage of
people
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 getting sick is extremely high. As an example, in Sri Lanka due to the increase in population around the
city
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 area
people
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 are living in flats which are contagious with a great number of diseases
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 as malaria, dengue, etc.
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, many youngsters and old generation
people
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 are prone to weight issues since they are addicted to fast food outlets around the area.
On the other hand
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,
cities
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 are the place which is developed when compared to the other
areas
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 in the country.
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, there are many job opportunities for
people
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 who are highly paid salaries and a vast number of
hospitals
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 and other organizations. When considering
hospitals
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, experienced doctors and other staff members are working in
city
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hospitals
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 and many
people
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 from rural
areas
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 come to take medicine from these
hospitals
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 which are
also
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 luxurious. As an example, in Sri Lanka rural
hospitals
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 are unable to treat the patients they are immediately transferred to
hospitals
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 located around metropolitan
areas
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 because they have more developed devices and facilities.
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, even if
people
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 get sick living in
cities
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 they have other alternatives to visiting
hospitals
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. In conclusion, I partially agree that living in urban
areas
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 makes
people
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 sick due to air pollution, fast food stores, and infectious diseases, but the opportunities
cities
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 provide for
people
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 are enormous and individuals can overcome their health issues by getting proper medications from developed
hospitals
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.
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