Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter: •Say how long you want to rent the apartment for, •Explain why your plans have changed, •Tell the owner about a problem in the apartment.

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Dear Akash, Hope
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letter finds you in radiant spirit, as you know I have been renting your apartment 46 Cedarwoods, for the
last
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4 months and the reason that I
initially
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went for a 6-month agreement is that I started a new role at a company and was on a 6 months contract. Fortunately, my company has decided they want to hire me full-time and made me a permanent position offer. Since I am planning on accepting
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offer and considering that it is only a 10-minute walk from the apartment, I was hoping we could extend our agreement.
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I have your attention, just wanted to mention that the fan in my bedroom is not working properly, sometimes it operates and sometimes it does not, I was hoping you could send someone to check it out. I will be waiting for your reply and hopefully, we can come to an arrangement. Sincerely, Krushang Patel

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task achievement
For further improvement, you might consider providing more details about the duration of the extended rental you desire. Specificity can enhance clarity for the owner.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. The second paragraph combines the request to extend the lease and the issue with the fan. Consider separating these ideas for increased clarity.
coherence cohesion
The opening and closing of the letter are well-structured and polite, which contributes positively to the overall tone.
task achievement
The letter effectively communicates the change in circumstances for wanting to extend the lease and provides a reasonable explanation.

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