Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's world, a lot of things, we think we need are somehow put into our mind by multimedia
companies
to serve the purpose of their client and
on the other hand
, it is sometimes associated with
real
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a real
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need for some
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valuable
product that can change our life in a better way. I personally think that it is covered by
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of these
companies
, it is more like
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sugar
cotting
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cutting
coating
of the actual truth.
First
and foremost,
companies
are there for their own profit so thinking that they are looking for their
customers
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interest is foolish. Most of these
companies
need to answer their
share holder
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and need to profits. So, these
companies
hire
third
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party
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parties
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to make attractive
advertisement
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advertisements
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to attract more buyers.
For example
, around
an
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year ago one of my
friend
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friends
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bought a Television just by looking at a marketing video online but he never used it. These videos are specifically designed
by
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fog
human
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mind into thinking they need their product with help of human psychologists.
Lastly
, There are very few things that we need,
everthing
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everything
else is what we want. It is really important to understand the difference between the two
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because
these multinational
companies
are very good
in
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fooling people into thinking that what they want is what they need but
that is
not true at all.
For instance
, you only need food, water and shelter and everything else you think you require is a fabricated need and that
where
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these product
seller
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win
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the game. To
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, it is not bad to buy things that you might not need but it is
definetly
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definitely
an issue if we start replacing them with our needs. Setting up clear
boundries
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boundaries
is a good start.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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