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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Learning other languages have a vital role in
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 of communication. Some experts believe that learning
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 language is more useful in primary schools than
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secondary schools.
This
 notion has some advantages and disadvantages, but I believe that the benefits are more than the drawbacks. The majority of people opine that it is better for
children
 to learn a new accent
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 because the
children
's brain works like an empty hard disk and it is sharply fresh to grasp new things.
Hence
, they can be taught easily and the new language can become permanent in their mind.
For example
, some research has been done in
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 and professionals found out that
children
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French
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 the age
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 6-10 more than
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 ones.
On the other hand
, some locals do not let their
children
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be taught
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 because they believe that their
children
 can become confused in comparison to their native language.
For instance
, they may blend the grammar of both languages into each other and bad results can happen due to
this
 situation. To conclude, learning
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 dialect have a lot of merits
such
 as better internalizing the
second
 dialect in
children
 who are
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 primary levels and understanding new things with much more speed. But
also
, there is a demerit in
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 confusing the native grammar with the new one. I think the advantages of
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 more than the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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