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Some people believe school children should be given multiple short vacations, while others believe they should get one long vacations. Give the advantages of both and express your own point of view

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Holidays take an important role in our life. There is a discussion between people about
to have
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couple
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 of short period vacations or single
long term
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long-term
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 vacations for
students
. In my
opinion
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 both have
consider
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 different benefits in our life. Generally, most
of
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students
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the students
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 are excited when they are waiting
the
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 closing
time
 of
schools
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school
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.
Long
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A long
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 period of study is not efficient when we compare it with short terms. Lots of
researches
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research
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 show that
to take
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 a
vacation
 helps us to relax and
concantrate
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concentrate
 more when we turn back to school or work.
Therefore
, more than one
vacation
 help pupils to be ready to school
more
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and more
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 refreshed.
On the other hand
,
students
 can arrange each
holiday
 for different purposes and
dont
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don't
 need to make everything in one long
holiday
.
However
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 it requires well-organized
time
 management and
bunch
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a bunch
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 of money
,
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apply
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 because
in
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on
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 each
holiday
 families will face off with lots of
expense
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.
On the contrary
,
to get
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getting
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single
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a single
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vacation
 has different advantages,
such
 as making
long duration
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long-duration
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 plans,
travel
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travelling
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 overseas countries or
stay
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staying
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 somewhere
how
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as
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 long is it possible.
In addition
, to make plans
in
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at
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 one
time
 for
long
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a long
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 period is fairly beneficial, if the parents work and
dont
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don't
 have
opportunity
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 to take
annual
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an annual
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holiday
 whenever they want. With
this
, caretakers can consume
the
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apply
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time
 with their children. In conclusion, studying takes
long
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a long
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 duration of our
live
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lives
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 and
students
require
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to require
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 to rest as much as possible. Quality of
vacation
 is as important as quantity, so
students
 or people who
is
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are
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 related
with
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to
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 study should take
holiday
 as much as possible.
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