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Writing Samples
Band 8

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Ben, I hope
this
 letter finds you well.I have been busy with my studies as you know that I am planning to visit Australia for my Masters and the same time I am really excited to see you too. I got my offer letter from Deakin University for the March semester which will be starting on the 03rd of March.
Moreover
,I found a place to stay through online website and I booked it from the day I arrive to Australia and It's 5 minutes walk from the University
as well as
 all the public transport around the accommodation.
Furthermore
,I am planning to get a part-time job to do
while
 I am studying as It will be helpful for financially for my parents and for me to pay rent and for my other expenses.I would really appreciate If you could help me to find a job and I have already applied through online but I didn't receive any reply.Would it possible for you to print my resume and drop into some cafes,restaurants or any retail places until I come? It would be really appreciated if you could do that for me. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Ishana
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea along with supporting information relevant to the paragraph's main point for stronger unity.
coherence cohesion
Maintain clear transitions between ideas and paragraphs to enhance readability and flow.
task achievement
Fully address all parts of the task. While a good attempt has been made, elaborating more on the study plans and explicitly explaining your financial situation for part-time work would enhance response completeness.
task achievement
Make sure that the tone suits the task type. A letter to a friend should be friendly but also clear and to the point. The tone in this letter is generally suitable.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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